What 9 months can do | Anneke

Essay 1
Written on 13-12-2015

Both texts mention a manner which  decrease stress. The first text advocates drinking hot tea will calm people down. The second text on the other hand, says that yoga increases people’s relaxation. Also, it  explains how to stay motivated if you would like to attend this sport.

The first text outlines the benifits of drinking hot tea. It gives particular mention of which kinds of tea have a calming effect on our brain. These are especially  white and lemon tea. It gives a couple examples  why tea has such an calming effect on us. Also, it points out that tea calms our brain but without us feeling sleepy.

The second text considers that yoga increases the relaxation of your mind. It says that doing yoga with more people will make you stay motivated and warns against power yoga. It concludes that you should consult a specialst before choosing which yoga class you want to join. Because, there are a lot of different yoga classes with different purposes.

In conclusion, I think that tea and yoga both quieten our brain. As for the first text, tea has a relaxing effect on our brain. Because, I have felt the effect myself.  Also, I do yoga sometimes when I feel stressed and it does calm me down. Unfortunatly I do not stay motivated because I do yoga on my own. So, I agree with the second text that a class setting may help people stay motivated.


Essay 2
Written on 20-09-2016

The article considers several questions about the current issues in the teaching of Grammar. The third chapter  considers when should we teach Grammar.  The fifth chapter argues if grammar teaching should be intensive or extensive.

The first chapter outlines the advantages and disadvantages of  teaching grammar in the first L2 asset or in a stage in which they already made some grammatical components of their own. It warns against mistakes which might slip in in a earlier phase. Because, these mistakes will be hard to erase.  It gives examples of other ways grammar can be taught.

The fifth paragraph argues that extensive grammar teaching mostly occurs within a learning activity and intensive grammar teaching to erase mistakes students made  in an assignment. It claims that corrective feedback improves ones grammar through communicative lessons. It says that exessive grammar teaching isn’ effecient and therefor mistrusted. Also, It gives the benefits of tailer made tests.

I think that grammar must be taught in the first L2 asset, because it’s important to detect errors in the first stages of learning it. You will be able to develop your grammar faster and you will score higher on the tests. If we look at the fifth paragraph, I think that teachers should teach both exessive and extensive grammar ways. Using both ways of teaching will erase errors and improve grammar more swiftly.


Comparing the essays

When I read both essays I can come to the conclusion that nine months of studying English can make a huge difference. First thing that occured to me was that Essay 2 starts off much better than than essay 1 does. Because, the first paragraph is summerised in a more fluent and clearer way. Also, may use of English has become more formal and I started using more advanced words. Comparing both essays as a whole, I find the first essay slovenly and sometimes inclear in comparison with the second essay.

My improvements:

- My vocabulary has expanded
- Forming more clear sentences in an essay
- My use of English
- Able to make the essay sound more fluent
- Mention what must be said
- Way of summerizing

What I want to improve:


- Improve making clear sentences

For example, this sentence written in essay 2:

'It warns against mistakes which might slip in in a earlier phase. Because, these mistakes will be hard to erase'.

Could change it into this:

'It warns against  mistakes which might be hard to erase when made in an earlier phase'.


- Stop repeating verb in a sentence

For example, this sentence written in essay 2:

'You will be able to develop your grammar faster and you will score higher on the tests'.

The 'you will' market in read is superfluous.